mishima - we cross posted, I wasn't commenting on your article or your post, just making a general observation.
I think you could have been briefer if you were writing from your own point of view, but if that's what the manufacturers expect you to write then fair enough. From my own point of view, if I'm researching a product online then I'm looking for information about the product. The fact that the information is on the packaging is irrelevant to me, because I don't have the packaging to read! So rather than saying "In the top left hand corner there is a small label marked “open”. Opening this panel reveals two-pages of in depth information regarding the technologies and methods used in the implementation of this fan." I would say "A fold out panel provides in-depth technological information." See... briefer