mothers day

[ibrien14]

i kow this is a weird request but i am after a love poem for my partner that incorporates the raising of my children but i dont have the first clue where to find them online can any1 help me

[Virtual Monkey]

Write one. It'd mean a lot more.

[IBM]

And then post it on here, it'd certainly mean more to me that way

[sammyc]

I've had a trawl through me book collection can't find anything suitable sorry - keep an eye out though. If all else fails, this is all my own work and you're welcome to it if you don't mind a smack from the missis that is....
''Asked you out, said you would - fell in love like couples should - had some kids, because we could - & thanks to you, they turned out good''
let you know if i find something a bit more shakespearean.

[JK Ferret]

I wrote a poem a few years back... posted it here, got positive feedback

No help to you whatsoever however, but if you do compose your own, post it here and we'll be more than happy to tell you how it sounds

sammyc, yours is rather lame... couldn't even get more than four lines! Bit more work needed, methinks

[sammyc]

sammyc, yours is rather lame...

well that was the idea? - a 'how not to do poetry', from the 'spring is sprung the grass is riz...' genre. everyone's a critic... i shall take my deadpan humour away, if you're all going to misunderstand me. ah, the artistic temperament.
(ok, i know that you know that i know you know i was being deliberately lame, let's not start...)

[chicken]

''Asked you out, said you would - fell in love like couples should - had some kids, because we could - & thanks to you, they turned out good''

sammyc, yours is rather lame... couldn't even get more than four lines! Bit more work needed, methinks

Pah, what are you talking about man?! It's a veritable masterpiece!

TBH it's short, sweet and to the point and I reckon it would go down quite well in a card or something where there's not much room and it is unexpected. If you were however to make a big announcement and declare the reading of Your Poem to the room in a loud boomy voice before reading it out then expectations may be somewhat higher!

ibrien14: Don't get it from the net, make something up yourself. She'll appreciate it more if it's unique to her and you'll be happier if it was your work.

[sammyc]

yes but it's meant to be bad... good grief.. wish i'd never started now.. :

i've had a look round the net, can't find a lot suitable for the occasion - mostly greetings-cardy-versy stuff ie
If I can hold a flower
And watch its petals fade,
If I can touch the well worn earth
On which my children played,
If I can hold one moment
Of the times you've made me smile,
Then I can take the bad times,
For you've made them all worthwhile.

or

To my love on Mother's Day,
Our habitude and light:
May you be as happy as
You make us with your love.
Winds may blow the world away,
Intent on reaching night.
For us there'll always be a home,
Everywhere you move.

kind of thing. let us know if you get anywhere. there's loads of sites with some very bad stuff, & so yes you may have to just put pen to paper....

[sammyc]

... assuming William 'Elyk' Wordsworth isn't going to get out his quill & give us a sonnet that is...

[Zak33]

To carry and bear
To raise and make happy
To cook me my dinner
And change babies nappy.


I thank you

[sammyc]

^

[JK Ferret]

... assuming William 'Elyk' Wordsworth isn't going to get out his quill & give us a sonnet that is...

Ooh, feisty today aren't we

Yes I did realise you were deliberately being 'not quite as good as you would normally be'
That's why I posted what I did

In reality, it could turn out as a brilliant start to a poem, it's defo better than about 50% of my whole poems (consider I've only ever written 2...), and I'm guessing you didn't even think that hard to come up with it.

Of course, I could be wrong and that alone took you 5 hours, but I doubt you'd say so if that was the case anyhows

Finally, don't start on any spelling badness, I'm not quite all there tonight...

EDIT: oh yeah, very good Zak

[Zak33]

my mum (ponolops) taught me to rhyme. I'm not as good as she....but I can spout when needed

[sammyc]

Ooh, feisty today aren't we

In reality, it could turn out as a brilliant start to a poem...

one more time - no. it. couldn't. and there is no 'as good as i'd normally be.'

it's defo better than about 50% of my whole poems (consider I've only ever written 2...)

well we need to hear them then don't we?

Finally, don't start on any spelling badness, I'm not quite all there tonight...

wasn't going to - spelling A1. not quite all there? wasssup?
n.b. this isn't helping ibrien at all.....

[JK Ferret]

one more time - no. it. couldn't. and there is no 'as good as i'd normally be.'

Okay. If you must insist

well we need to hear them then don't we?

Easy.. Good one and not as good one
You'll notice how the second got 0 replies..

n.b. this isn't helping ibrien at all.....

Well, it really doesn't matter much anymore, the day has been and gone now

[sammyc]

it has? 'wondered which of you men would be first to spot that...' don't have my own mum now in case you think i've ignored the whole thing. although actually i practically never know which date anything is. i have been known to get these things wrong before - i once got into an argument with a skinhead on a bus and delivered the immortal line 'haven't you got a mother you could be visiting?' (meaning haven't you got anything better to do than argue with me). i was on my way up to see mine 2 weeks early, he would've thought i was a nutter - shut him up though! just going to go and read your oeuvre with a cuppa. catch you later.