Personally, bobsters edits look a lot, lot more natural, the skin looks pretty much spot on, nice natural tones, in comparison to your original edit, your image is really warm.
The actual picuture itself is a good photo though, captures a nice mood
Also, bobster, thanks for sharing the crops, it's amazing to see how much better/different an image looks with a creative crop!
One I took in the winter months with my iPhone 4 - not edited.